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     i am crawling out of my skin
  for a chance to taste new blood
beneath the cartilage lost from

crr
  raaa
    ckk
   k
  i
nn
   g
      the bones down my spine:
                 i don't mind
   the discomfort,
                       i find it leaving
                     the kind of sore that makes you want it
    all over again but

     but i am not a serpent
peeling away layers of excess,
and the world begs us not
  to rip away at such
                    heavy
sutures & staples:
               still,  i
   a
      c        e
           h
                to free the quiet capillaries
        and sweet sinew
           of my being,
                             
                           buried
                             below
i actually really rather like this one, number 3 for napo (though i didn't write it for that intention).

do you guys like the way the words are formatted/spaced out?
i don't ever play much with visual poetry but cracking was begging me to do it ok


alternate title suggestions ?
i don't like my titles lately


god i can't stop editing this sorry


(c)
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:iconersatz-moon:
ersatz-moon Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks (:
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:iconbenarnia:
benarnia Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I

f e
a
r
king

Love this. And the format. The word choice. The message. The emotion it elicited.

Magic
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hah thank you :heart:
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:iconbenarnia:
benarnia Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I can't do that in a comment.

^says freaking^
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:icongogocherryrose:
i really do like the formatting! yes. :)
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks (:
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:iconstaphysagria:
staphysagria Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Mmm. I like your writing, dear.
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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